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grammar. p: punctuation. :
remove word. s: spelling. f-ww.:
(in)formal word. wo: word order. :
add a word. wf: word form. *: possibly ok.
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The fact that there is global warming can’t be denied. Even
though some governments try to misinform us about it by saying
that there is no such problem, it doesn't take a rocket scientist
to realize that temperatures are rising.
There is also a new theory that states that the main cause
of global warming is not the CO2 accumulated in the atmosphere,
but the water vapor. It would be this gas then and not the
CO2 which was responsible for higher temperatures.
The Earth reflects part of the energy that comes from the
sun and these gases bounce part of this heat back to the Earth’s
surface, creating the greenhouse effect.
It was handy to say that what was responsible for the greenhouse
effect was the CO2 when the main industries of competing countries
were producing it, in order to go against them. Maybe now,
for some other self-interested reasons, it is handy to say
that the water vapor is responsible.
Who knows what the truth is? The man in the street doesn´t
have the tools to investigate it by himself. All we know is
what we can see: the temperatures are rising.
Why? Or is anybody going to do anything about it? We don´t
know.
Victoria G.
Explanations:
The
Global Warming - To speak about a specific item that we both
know about, you can use words like "this," "that"
and "the" to define which object or subject you
are talking about. For example, if you have a bowl of soup
with carrots in front of you and you say "I like the
carrots," I know from the context that you are speaking
about the carrots in front of you. The word "these"
as in the sentence "I like these carrots" doesn't
change the meaning much. However, if I say "I like carrots,"
I am talking about carrots in general. If you say "The
Global Warming," it is confusing because it sounds like
you're talking about a specific and limited case which we
both know about.
"that
there is not
such problem" - "that there is no
such problem" or, if you prefer, "that there is
not such a
problem."
"anybody
can realize that temperatures are rising"
- This is an awkward (clumsy) Spanglishy way of saying something
like "it doesn't take a rocket scientist to realize that
temperatures are rising." Something simpler would be
"anybody can see."
"There
is also a new theory that states that the
cause for global warming..." - "There is also a
new theory that states that the
main cause for global warming..." "the
cause" implies there is only one cause, while
you say elsewhere that there are more causes.
"It
would be this gas then and not CO2 the
main responsible for higher temperatures."
- "It would be this gas then and not the CO2 which
was responsible for higher temperatures."
"The main responsible"
is Spanglish because "responsible" can be a noun
referring to the person in charge in Spanish, while in English
it's an adjective. Also, I use the past of the verb "to
be" here ("was
responsible") because it sounds as if you're using the second
conditional in this sentence implying something like "If
you believe this theory, it would be this gas ..."
This error is repeated twice later in the text: "the
responsible for the greenhouse effect" and "it
is the water vapor the responsible."
"The
Earth irradiates
part of the energy that comes from the sun..." - "The
Earth reflects
part of the energy..." "Irradiate" is not the
most appropriate synonym for "reflect" in this context.
To "irradiate" sounds like the Earth is sending
out its own rays and light. Possibly, you don't want to repeat
"reflect" twice in the same text (you use it again
later in the text). You can solve this by using other words
like "bounce" and "trap."
"It
came
handy to say that..." - "It was
handy to say that..." Perhaps, this is another Spanglish
error because in Spanish you say "vino a mano."
"competitive
countries" - "competing
countries" A competitive country isn't necessarily competing
with my country. It may be competitive in other areas, but
a competing country is clearly competing with mine.
"...were
producing it and in this
way going against them." - "...were
producing it, in order to go
against them." In this case, I think you want to use
the second "connecting phrase" or "Linker"
to describe "purpose" rather than "summarizing"
what went before. In other words, in your text you seem to
be saying that first world governments may be actively
conspiring (the purpose) through the use of a very extensive
propaganda campaign to sabatoge third world countries' efforts
to industrialize and compete with the first world.
"Maybe
now, for some other
interested reasons,..." - "Maybe now, for some other
self-interested
reasons,..." "Reasons" combines with "self-interested"
and not "interested" in this context. "Self-interested"
means that I am only interested in myself. "Interested"
combines well in other phrases like "interested parties."
"How
knows what the truth is?" - "Who knows what the
truth is?" This is a silly mistake at your level.
"The
man in the street doesn't count
with the tools to investigate it by himself."
- "The man in the street doesn't have
the tools to investigate it by himself."
This is a Spanglish error as "contar con" translates
directly to "count with" and means "have."
"All
we know it
is what we can see..." - "All we know is what we
can see..." There are two subjects in the first sentence:
1) "All we know" and "it." As it is repetitive
and redundant, eliminate one: "it."
"
temperatures are rising." - "the temperatures are
rising." Now, DO use the article "the"
to define and limit the temperatures to only those that have
to do with "Global Warming" and not to the temperature
of your oven, for instance.
Of course,
you're free to write whatever you like. However, the instructions
stated: "Give your opinion about what should be done."
You didn't give your opinion: "...the temperatures are
rising. Why? Or is anybody going to do anything about it?
We don´t know." Examiners on a First Certificate
exam would possibly fail your written text, which is probably
a good idea in order to limit students memorizing texts to
write on the exam.
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